Editing

A few weeks ago In language B class I have learned how to make my sentence better. I have learned about Complete Thought or Idea. Fragment : incomplete Idea. Every Sentence need a subject. Predicate: verb( the action). A capital letter. A full stop/ question mark. I have learned this to make my writhing better. Here is my old post.

The last thing that I was curious about was death. I want to know how it 's fell's and What will happen to us and when we are died that's are the question that I want to know and able to understand and find the answer. I kind of ask my religion teacher about the question because I thought religion teacher would understand about it. The religion teacher explain it to me but it's still confuse about it. In religion there are 3 religion in our school christen, .There is still a lot of thing that I don't know about death so I try to research about it there was a lot of information but it was kind of hard for me to understand because the word was kind of hard for me to understand. The reason that I want the answer is because all the people in this world will die eventually. Even I will die but want know how it's fell but for me to know this felling is to ask someone that is all ready dead but I cannot ask them because they are dead.

So the thing that I want to know is bout death how can it do to us and how does it feel this are the thing that I want to know because I'm going to die as well but still if I'm dead I can remember anything that happen to me so this are the thing that I'm curious about.


After 6 week of learning this I change my writing. This is the video. That shows how did I change it and I also explain it as well.

The last thing that I was curious about was death. I want to know how it feel’s. What will happen to us when we are dead? Those are the questions that I want to know. I also want to able to understand find the answer. I kind of asked my religion teacher. The question because I thought religion teacher would understand. The religion teacher explained it to me, but it’s still confusing. In religion there are 3 religions in our school Christian, Buddies and Catholic. There are still a lot of things that I don't know about death. I try to research. There was a lot of information, but it was kind of hard for me to understand because the word was kind of hard for me to understand. The reason that I want the answer is because all the people in this world will die eventually. Even I will die but I want know how it's feel but for me to know this feeling. I need to ask someone that is all ready dead, but I cannot ask them because they are dead.


I want to know is bout death. How does it feel? These are the things that I want to know. I'm going to die as well but still if I'm dead I can’t remember anything that happen to me. These are the things that I'm most curious about